Revise Writing Criteria 1 Introduction: Good start with the introduction. The thesis statement is the last sentence in the paragraph and tells readers the main points covered in the paper. Criteria 2 Content: Business Form: There are instances in which a partnership may work but in explaining the reasoning this business form, there are particular strengths and weaknesses that need to be discussed. The most significant disadvantage of the business form was not well discussed and it does not appear that other forms were viewed or it would have been seen that there are better choices than a partnership. Content: Financing Assistance: Selecting a partnership may mean that the partner is selected for finances but what does the partner get in return.The best option was not selected – one in which Jack could would not have to worry about having the funds to operate and pay the short-term bills.Consider revisiting the entrepreneurship module to learn about the options for financing. Content: Staffing Changes/Organizational Structure: A horizontal organizational structure is a good choice but is not only based on the reason provided.Instead of discussing the different staffing positions, it was indicated that statistics be put together. What statistics are you referring to and how would these be used to determine positions or organization? Content: Customer and Promotion: Interesting point about availability of food. Not sure why food trucks and carts would not have the same products.Promotion is not discussed in any detail. this section of the paper has a great potential for possibilities but what is presented is extremely limited.Consider adding to this section of the paper. Content: Ethics/Social Responsibility: Very little is presented in this section of the paper. There is so much that can be added to this section.Consider looking at the facts from the case study.Criteria 3 Summary: Good summary capturing the main topics. Criteria 4 Critical Thinking/Reasoning: The concepts are not fully developed. What is presented is very high level but needs more detail.Consider using the facts from the case study. Application of Resources: It is unclear as to where the information came from in the paper. There are only three in-text citations at the end of a paragraph that doesn’t demonstrate use of course material or facts from case study. Criteria 5 Attention to Instructions: All of the different sections have been addressed but in doing so, a comprehensive analysis is not performed.Students were asked to use facts from the case study, to use course material and to cite and reference the material used. Whenever any material is used, it has to be cited. Putting a citation at the end of a paragraph does not capture whatever is in the paragraph. What is used does not well support the course material. Criteria 6 Writing Mechanics: Overall, the writing is fairly good. There are extra words that are not needed. The use of “therefore” is not needed in most cases. There are also missing words in various sentences. Criteria 7 APA Style (6th ed.): See note above for using in-text citations and references. The references look good but in-text citations are missin throughout the entire paper.Consider looking at the sample APA paper under weeks 4 and 7 and review the material in the Course Resources module on APA. Not citing can lead to academic dishonesty allegations that you do not want. Avoid such a possibility by citing all material used.
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